awesome! mind blowing!! luved the narration, felt like I was right there, following the protagonist. keep them coming.

wow..great narration...it felt like I was right there inside the story..feeling your pain, sadness and sorrow and of course enjoying the disco lights!!! :)

Nice.

Simply awsome. Bravo..

".......A lonely red shawl on the roof of the adjoining
house floats in the air holding a rope to which it is clipped on. I push
the smoke out of my lungs, for a while, it stays in front of me making
the view of the red shawl foggy......."  BEAUTIFUL!!!

Bumped.

Very well written.

 

perfectionist,pinkey,meera,kiddo thank you all for your wonderful words.
nakkali keti, you really caught me it happens to be my favourite lines too, in whole of the story, thank you very much.

Sorry to miss you Serial, thanks to you as well.

awesome bro.

Kanchho Bhai, thanks.

woahh..i nearly missed this write up !
good that the thread got bumped : )

very well written...crisp and fresh : D

Piggy, it's really great that it got bumped. Thanks and do enjoy the place wherever you are. 

Very intense, very descriptive of everything. You go a great job of visualizing your surroundings and portraying them to your reader!

I can feel myself sitting in that very room they were drinking in.

Thanks for the read :)

Thanks Dekchi. Yes, it is very true, my every attempt is towards making the readers see than to read.

Eclectic ,
Very nice read simply loved it . Jhanai miss garechu. How r u ? Ajkal SB ma audaina ta timi ?

LL, my neighbour, thank you very much. In Hindi there is a saying, " Der aaye par durusth aaye." I am good and fine, as you already know it.